Both jack and Susan are sitting on the kitchen table eating breakfast. They both talk vaguely and head off to the car and go work.
2. INT. WORKPLACE. AFTERNOON
Jack's at work he's very distracted doesn't do much work
3. EXT. FRONT YARD. EVENING
jack parks his car and couple minutes later Susan comes but in another mans car who has dropped her off.
Jack gives him weird looks and just goes inside just before Susan comes over and tries to give him a hug.
4. INT. BEDROOM. NIGHT.
Susan's reading a book tries making a conversation with him but jack's still avoiding her and just walks out the room and goes out
5. INT. KITCHEN. MORNING.
Susan wakes up a bit late she hears the door shut. when she comes down she sees that jack has already left which means she has to take a taxi and go work as he left without her.
6. INT. LIVING ROOM. EVENING.
Susan:
Why didn't you wait for me today normally we go work together. why have you been avoiding me for. what have i done.Jack:
i don't care about all this if i ever see you with that guy ever again I'll break both yours and that bastards legs!
jack walks out the room.
7. INT. KITCHEN. MORNING.
jack sits on the table drinking coffee. Susan wakes up late again comes down and jack gives her breakfast
Jack:
Morning darling.
Susan gives a vague smiles and sits down and drinks her coffee.
8. EXT. FRONT YARD. EVENING.
Susan gets dropped off by Phil (work colleague). They both go inside.
9. INT. BEDROOM. NIGHT.
after they go inside Susan goes into the bedroom jack gets angry pushes her against the wall and shouts at her. he starts hitting her and throws her in the bathroom and locks the door.
10. INT. LIVING ROOM. MORNING.
This is a really good start Shumana, well done.
ReplyDeleteNext you needd to finish off the last few scenes and carry on with the dialogue.
I'm pleased, you have worked hard!